Shattered Planes Archives (Seasons 4 & 5)
The Board => Archive => Void => Topic started by: Zero on January 19, 2010, 08:04:43 PM
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I am ready to begin class.
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Define Literacy, and in your own words. I WILL check various different sources, including Wikipedia, Encyclopedia Dramatica, various dictionaries and encyclopedias to make sure you aren't simply copying something else.
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Literacy means being able to make long detailed RP posts that enhance the purpose of the plot and add on to the story.
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Elaborate. What does it mean to enhance the purpose of the plot and add on to the story?
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Your posts should add twists and variety to the story rather than violate the main purpose of the story, and to enhance the purpose of the plot means to do posts that make the purpose of the plot revealed in detail through the data of your posts which should be lengthy.
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Wrong. Adding twists to the story is not always a good thing, just as variety is not always a good thing.
And to see how the second part of your post is wrong, define the 'purpose of a plot.'
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The Purpose of a plot is to further some aim of the author which for example in my case would be if I used Avidan to attack Terragouve, I would be furthering my goal to gain more land for myself. There is one example.
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Wrong. The Purpose of a plot, using GE as an example, would be the overall plot. Not personal sideplots, the overall board-wide plot. It's not furthering a plot, the purpose of a plot IS the plot.
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Any Assignments?
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Yeah. Do some research and find out what it means for a board to be a literate RP. This is due by midnight tomorrow, though you should be able to finish by midnight tonight.
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Literate RPs have large posts of over 400 words per post at least up to 2500 at some occasions. These RPs donot allow spelling errors or godmodding.
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Close. Literate rp's often have 250 word posts with very few grammatical or spelling errors, though the actual requirement varies from board to board. They require at least intermediate writing skills as well as realistic, varied characters. They often have multiple plots working around the main storyline, with every member being responsible for furthering these plots.
I won't teach you how to not godmod or creating realistic and varied characters, because those topics are not within the scope of this particular lesson. I want you to pick two other aspects of a literate board, and those will consist of the actual topics taken care of for your Basic level Literacy course.
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I need to work on the spelling errors and the length of my posts the most.
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Alright. First, I suggest switching to a browser that has a built in spellchecker, such as Firefox or Google Chrome. That alone should help a great deal with your spelling problems. Now, for your post lengths, give me four ways you can lengthen your posts.
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Firefox or Google Chrome.
Sorry to butt in, but as an added note from a technical standpoint, both have a lot better security. Firefox especially. I highly recommend getting one of these browsers.
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And even besides those two good reasons, Internet Explorer is realy starting to lag behind the other browsers in terms of internet programming standards. At this rate, IE will no longer be able to correctly view many different websites, possibly including forums that utilize CSS for their graphics, like IPBFree and SMF.
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I have now downloaded FireFox.
1. I could put in details into the post.
2. I could also make it double spaced.
3. Another way I could do it is to rewrite my post several times in third and first person.
4. I could post a revised edition of the post I originally was going to post that is much more detailed.
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1 would work, 2 would make absolutely no difference at all to the word count. 3, what? 4: If I think you know enough to be able to lengthen your post well we can try that.
Tell me why 2 won't work, and please explain what you mean by three.
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2 wouldn't work since it would merely be adding spaces and not much else. 3 : What I mean is that when I am about to make a post, I will put it in word. I will then rewrite the post in first person three times and then in third person five times and then with the fifth third person one, I shall post it as my post.
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How would that help you?
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It would allow me to remove any godmodding, any spelling mistakes and any other problems with the posts.
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It will also take eight times as much time.
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What do you suggest?
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I suggest simply learning to avoid godmodding the first time, which Hikaru will teach you about when you take the Don'ts class. As for lengthening your posts, you need to learn to use a decent vocabulary and writing skills to increase the amount of detail in your posts. For example, instead of:
Vailen mumbled a few words, and wings appeared on his back. He then flew over the canyon he was standing next to.
You could use something like...
Vailen, seeing the rather large chasm before him, knelt down and clasped his hands just below his chin, closing his eyes in reverence. "Divus, dare me connatus Alae placeo!" He chants, low and strong as his face lifts up towards the heavens. His face turns quickly into a grimace of pain as the sound of ripping fabric echoes across the empty, rocky plains. He arches his back hard, causing his spine to crack as he screams out in pain, great white-feathered wings bursting from the flesh on his shoulder blades, spraying blood out behind him. Kneeling forwards and panting hard, Vailen slowly rises to his feet, giving his newly acquired, albeit temporary, wings a few beats to test them. With a pained smile, he gives himself several yards of space before the ledge, and takes a slow, deep breath. Charging forth with all the speed his legs can grant him, he tenses his wings and leaps over the edge of the canyon wall, gliding through the air for several moments before angling downwards, accelerating at a magnificent rate before quickly leveling out, and then pitching upwards, just barely making it over the edge of the cliff wall opposite of his starting point.
Now, I am going to give you a situation, and you are going to write two posts. First, using your normal rp'ing style, then useing an expanded vocabulary and detail to lengthen it.
I will give you a day to prepare if you like. Have someone let me know via IM as soon as you are ready. I will then post your situation, and you will have one half hour to post your normal post, and an hour and a half to post your lengthened post from the time I post the situation. You do not have to use up all the time, and I will be using the post times to verify that you posted within the time limit.
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Hawkeye's situation for his next Literacy lesson:
Yue Yan, a lvl three teenage sage, is confronted by a group of sage muggers, four lvl threes and lead by a level four. All are former soldiers, and so are physically fit, while Yue Yan is a student, and thus of average build. This is happening on an empty street with six foot tall stone walls on either side. Make the first post for both parties.
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Yue Yan had no time to deal with these muggers. This confrontation in his opinion was quite useless. He then thought of the stone pillars on either side. He could crush them with those and thus save his bacon.
The Mugger commander Alfonso said "Yue Yan, hand over your money. "
Yue Yan then held out his hand and focused. A small green sphere appeared in his hand. He then fired the orb hitting one of the structures. Once the orb collided with the structures.
The Muggers saw the structures begin to fall and quickly erected a field. Well some of them erected a field. The others however fired magical flames at Yue Yan to kill him.
Yue Yan upon seeing those annoyances spouting the flames at him concentrated. He then focused and between the time it took for the flames to get closer and to start burning him, he had effectively returned their own attack back at them though stronger than when they had sent it.
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Yan Yue a woman of high caliber and a student at that. She decided when she saw the muggers coming that she had to act fast. She wouldn't be mugged by them and have her one ticket to mastery yanked out from her. She focused and saw the structures. She would simply make the structures be her weapon and crush them with the structures when they got too close.
The Mugger leader Alfonoso said to Yan Yue "Surrender your money. We will also be using you as a toy. "
Yan Yue thought about what they had said. She then concentrated and a shattering noise was heard. The structures had broken. She held in a smile and then threw the structures via Telekensis at the Muggers.
The muggers formed an impromptu shield of magic but alas the shield against the weight of the structures didn't hold.
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Slowly Yue Yan walked through the streets alone by herself. She was not scared of anyone on these streets yet. She knew that her reputation as a student along with her temper would hold off most muggers. She was impatient to get to her destination and decided without further ado to take an alley shortcut. The moment she stepped into the alley however the muggers surrounded her. All of them were armed and had magic. In addition to that Yue Yan was only a level 3 magic user.
Yue "Please be gone. I have no desire to fight you and yet if I must I shall. "
Alfonso "You are going to be our prisoner. " He looked gruff and was by far the most powerful one in that group of muggers. He also had a heavy battle axe capable of splitting a skull in his hands.
Yue came to a decision and let her mind go blank for a moment. She remembered the sayings of her old mentor. Don't think, just act. It was time for actions and not thoughts. These muggers must be punished she decided. She then took a bird's eye view of the place by magically melding her mind with a bird. She saw the structures and then released the mind of the bird from her control.
Yue decided she would simply act by making the structures fight for her. In actuality what she intended to do was to make the structures fall on them and run. She had been shaken when she noticed that all of them had weapons. All she had in the way of weaponry was a slender knife. It wasn't much good against someone with an Axe that could split your skull.
Alfonso "Are you going to surrender?"
Yue "No!"
Alfonso then made a gesture to his men. All of them drew their weapons and focused their magic. "Very well then." He then gracefully spun towards her and swung the axe down at her as fast and as powerfully as he could.
Yue was a quick thinker. By utilizing her power of thought she came up with the perfect strategy to combat these brutes. It was true she was only a student and yet she had a way to bring them down. She removed a flower from her hair given to her by a boyfriend. "Animus Simalcram. " A simalcrum of a female appeared nearby. It looked identical to her. Perhaps this would bait them away from her.
Alfonso and his men saw two of Yue. They weren't sure at that moment which one to go after. Alfonso came to the conclusion that both should be captured. 2 of the level threes at his barked command went after Yue. The other two went after the simalcrum.
Yue then saw her moment to shine. She thought of peaceful and loving things. She needed to relax and let the power flow through her like water flowed through a stream or river. Finally she was relaxed enough. She then enveloped them in an illusion of their most pleasant desires.
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The mere fact that she's a student would entice them even more because it would make her an easier target. Think about it Hawkeye. She's only a student, and she's up against several fully grown adults, former soldiers no less. Not only that, but the leader is a level 4, while Yue Yan's a level three, making him not only a great deal more experienced than her, but more powerful as well. She would not be able to win the battle alone. Hell, she may not even be able to adequately fight back out of simple fear.
Do it again, better this time. Always, always always remember that you will not always win. You must be realistic. A teenage student would only be able to defeat a battle hardened, fully grown ex soldier with great amounts of luck.
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When Yue Yan saw them coming she was very scared of fighting them. She knew that on her own without any support whatsoever she would get her butt kicked and probably end up raped too. However she would even the odds somewhat by calling in the authorities with her magic. She quickly conjured up a flare in the sky signaling the authorities to come to her rescue.
Alfonso the leader of the muggers looked at her with a wicked gleam in his eye. It served to frighten her even more. Now she was scared and going to be raped. Could this day get any better for Alfonso? He didn't at that moment think so.
No Authorities came and so Yue Yan decided it was time to flee. The best laid plans go awry often. It was a life lesson she had learned. Fleeing would preserve her dignity and her virginity thus far and so fleeing is what she must accomplish. She muttered a spell so they couldn't hear it and caused a portal to open.
Yue Yan then fled through the portal. She thought she was safe finally. However Alfonso had changed the portal to bring her right back to where she was before going through it. Yue Yan would have to be creative. Teleportation was the only thing she hadn't as of yet tried to perform to escape. She would transcend the mortal plane temporarily and so she teleported out of there to a middle ground where they couldn't come.
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...a level three mage would be able to walk through different dimensions on her own? Yeah, I didn't think so either. Face it Hawkeye, the situation's hopeless for her. The best she can pull off on her own would be to take down as many foes as she can before being taken. That's how life is sometimes, you cannot escape the inevitable.
But, as far as the literal value of the post, B. Still have some grammar to work on, as well as wording things more interestingly. Less passive wording, more detail. Instead of having her mutter the spell, actually detail the incantation and gestures used to cast the spell. But, it is an acceptable post.
So, how difficult was that?
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It was easy. Oh and on an off topic thing, check your PMs.
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if it's that easy, why don't you do that with every single IC post you write?