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Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« on: January 10, 2010, 09:37:48 PM »
Name: Hiren Korr and now he is named Valor H. Korr
Age: 25
Race: Relorian Divae
Alliance: Legacy Empire
Biography: He chose not to go on the Great Migration  of the Relorians. Instead of accompanying them he decided to train in his magic on his own and without any help. During their 10 year absence he managed to steal one of the StarClan’s Sunslayers and do heavy duty modifications to it changing the very nature of the ship itself so he could fuel it with magic if required. He also made improvements on the Nourias Chamber of the ship itself. In addition he has trained as an Assasin and followed more or less in Nisorin’s original footsteps though he answers to a Liege.

Gallaghar has taught  Hiren how to focus and control the Star and Relorian Magic and how to utilize it together for an even greater magical effect. Further,  he has been learning how to do many things that allow him to mimic the other 2 spheres of Relorian Magic.  By learning Negion he has been enabled to mimic the magic although  his is stronger than that of a racial relorian due to the addition of Negion to his powerset by Avidan.  

He has chosen however to wait for Nisorin and the others to return so he can repent of his crimes against them and if they allow, earn their trust. However in the eventuality that gaining their trust is not allowed, he will remain loyal to Gallaghar to the bitter end since Gallaghar found him when he was bitterly injured and had Laura and Avidan heal him by combining their Negion.  He has changed his name however to Valor in order to avoid being recognized by the Relorians he betrayed.


Weapons: Regal Curcite blades x 3. Heart Splitter. Velmorian Flame Sword. Sage Pistols x 2.
Equipment: Curicite Long Sword.  Battle Mace named Volund.
Magic Level: 5
Force Level: 0
Appearance: He wears the garments of a Relorian Divae but in black leather now that he has become more of a mercenary. In addition, he has 2 holsters mounted on either side of his outfit. His eyes are a piercing green. In addition he has a golden cape on his back that usually contains shruiken style blades.  He also sometimes wears a black tunic and tight slacks. These are adorned with relorian Divae symbols that form a protective barrier of magic around himself.  
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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #1 on: January 10, 2010, 09:46:44 PM »
I hate to break it to you Hawkeye, but there's no better teacher than experience. Hiren won't have the same knowledge of Ancient Relorian magic techniques as a Relorian who went on the Migration would, because the migrated Relorians will have actually gotten to have Ancient Relorians teach them firsthand.

Other than that, the bio is short, but that's something Hikaru will be helping you with.

If he uses his magic to fuel the ship, he won't be able to use the Nourias chamber that would have been on the ship. Also, Sunslayers are pre-curicite ships, and thus are not as powerful, fast, or durable as a Sonnes Seele.
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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #2 on: January 11, 2010, 08:15:59 PM »
Reread it.
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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #3 on: January 11, 2010, 09:08:53 PM »
Unacceptable. Where we agreed on ONE Sunslayer, you turn around and request TEN, AND a Sonnes Seele. Completely and totally unacceptable.

Special effect regarding his cloak is denied, and your magic level cannot go higher than five for any reason.
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Seeing the world through a child's eyes is truly a unique experience. It helps you to retrieve that sense of awe, magic and wonder that you lost as you lost your innocence. Tell me, when was the last time that you thought of those childhood dreams? You know, the ones that you used to spend all your time wondering and fantasizing about? Have you forgotten them so easily? Have you forgotten what it felt like to see something for the first time, to see the magic in the mundane? Everyone says you should take the time to 'Stop and smell the roses'. But you should also take the time to look for the fairies, embrace the wind and enjoy the rain. Just once today, stop for a moment and look into that little piece of nature you pass everyday. Perhaps you may see something you did not notice before.

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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #4 on: January 11, 2010, 09:18:33 PM »
What's a Heart Splitter? I don't give you permission to use my SPLITTER glove design.
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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #5 on: January 11, 2010, 09:35:05 PM »
Heart Splitter = Relorian Rifle.  I say he is finished and in agreement with our terms only has one SunSlayer.
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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #6 on: January 12, 2010, 01:03:07 AM »
The Heartsplitter is a Relorian sniper rifle design. The original used was just a little less powerful than a Barret .50cal. That is the design that Hiren had access to.

There's a large difference between a standard rifle, and a dedicated sniper rifle Hawkeye.


As for the character himself, you still haven't changed the magic. And, because the Relorians, particularly Nisorin, had such a particular dislike for Hiren, they'd have made sure to remember his magical signature, so they wouldn't need his name to recognize him.

Because you've modified the Sunslayer so much, you'll have to request it as a new ship type. Due to the fact that he is a returning character and the circumstances behind his procurement of the Sunslayer are valid, I will allow the instant creation of ONE of the new ships once both the tech request and Hiren/Valor is approved.

However, because Hiren does not have the blueprints to the Sunslayer nor the technical and scientific expertise to have been schooled in Relorian spacefaring research, this one ship will be the only one of its type you will be able to request until he gets it to a group that can handle that sort of thing, and they study it for at least five days after you POST them beginning to study it. During that period of time, unless the research crew is on board, you will not be able to use the ship because it will have to be docked for them to perform their research.
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Seeing the world through a child's eyes is truly a unique experience. It helps you to retrieve that sense of awe, magic and wonder that you lost as you lost your innocence. Tell me, when was the last time that you thought of those childhood dreams? You know, the ones that you used to spend all your time wondering and fantasizing about? Have you forgotten them so easily? Have you forgotten what it felt like to see something for the first time, to see the magic in the mundane? Everyone says you should take the time to 'Stop and smell the roses'. But you should also take the time to look for the fairies, embrace the wind and enjoy the rain. Just once today, stop for a moment and look into that little piece of nature you pass everyday. Perhaps you may see something you did not notice before.

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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #7 on: January 12, 2010, 07:47:15 PM »
As you've fixed the Magic Level, I no longer see anything wrong with it. You have your first approval.
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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #8 on: January 12, 2010, 08:04:07 PM »
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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #9 on: January 12, 2010, 08:26:03 PM »
Remember that he cannot use the technology you requested until it's approved.
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Re: Relorian Traitor : Hiren Dark
« Reply #10 on: January 15, 2010, 12:21:15 AM »
Approved.
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