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Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« on: September 21, 2010, 10:56:13 PM »
Name: Rezick T. Dolos
Age: 250 but he does appear to be in his 30s
Race: Elite Warrior Human
Alliance: Elite Guard
Biography:    
His childhood was not the fondest one to remember actually. His mom was a spy for the Warrior Humans and his dad was a military commander. Put in school at an early age as he seemed to be a young einstein in the field of war itself, he was picked on and bullied a lot in school. One day though he could take it no longer and that was when his younger sister got killed by the school bullies or so it would seem. Really though they had beaten her into a coma from which she would be unlikely to awaken.

Suffice to say if you mess with the bull you get the horns. In this case you get a very ticked off kid who happens to be the son of a general and a spy and has inherited their genetics including their reflexes. A week or so after the event those bullies were dead, their brains splattered on the wall.

Once the fact had been revealed that he did indeed possess magical ability and more so than a normal Warrior Human, he was sent to a training camp of sorts during the summer after that school year. This of course would happen when was only 12 years old at the time.

No one dared to pick on him as they had heard rumors of him and given him the nickname Savage since he had torn the bullies that had killed his sister apart before putting them on the roast. Mostly his training did not work as his magic came by emotion, by strong instinct.

They couldn't teach him to control what they did not understand.  Well the kids mostly followed the rumor up until a certain point and then they insulted his bloodline. Which did not work out for them very well at all actually as it resulted in him attacking them rather viciously and sending them to the insanity ward of the hospital. Their minds had been shredded by him with magic.  By that time he had become 14 years old and had learned how to perform some powerful feats without relying on his emotions completely to do them.

As the years went by his skills progressed. Learning control of his emotions with the help of a monk who specialized in that kind of things he learned how to control his temper which for the other Warrior Humans was quite fortunate. This happened at about age 25 however when he learned how to control his emotions fully along with his magical capabilities and strength.

The monk however was more than satisfied with the progress of his pupil and deciding to be kind with his pupil he used an elixir to give his pupil more stamina and enhance most of his traits beyond that of a normal Warrior Human. This is how the elite warrior human transformation hit him. The transformation took weeks and Rezick was in a coma during most of that time as his body could not handle the transformation with him awake but he was kept alive by the monk.

But the monk knew that he would not live much longer and so he taught Rezick one of the greatest secrets that the Warrior Humans had. Namely the Elite elixir which could enhance any Warrior Human to the level of Elite and alter his DNA at a basic level making him impervious to weapons that would kill normal Warrior Humans. This final gift made Rezick a brilliant military strategist.

His father finally retired from the military at long last and his mother gave up espionage shortly thereafter, both of them retiring to a nice home in the country but they did not know how it was funded. Rezick was 28 at the time having spent only 3 years with the monk but learned so much about himself. During that time the governments that kept trying to rise were at war with each other. Brutal bloody wars that usually involved heavy fire power anyway.


Capitalizing  on the wars Rezick helped out one side or the other sometimes selling his plans to win to both sides, so that neither would get the blood thirsty advantage that they so wanted. As a result of what he had done nearly all the potential victims of the war survived what would have amounted to a massacre had he not done as he had wished. This took him 10 years and so at age 38 he began to concoct a plan. A plan to form an Elite Guard.

But sadly his parents betrayed him in the end and cast a stasis and sleep spell on him making him rest until he was 230. Or at least it seemed like they had betrayed him but they had actually not. Rather they were preparing him since both of them knew that he would be greater than both of them combined. His body and mind needed a chance to mature and so it was granted by the stasis field.

When he awoke a lot had changed and the Warrior Humans now lived on Nap. Of course this did not deter him from his original plan of making an Elite Guard to defend the Warrior Humans. His goal to protect everyone from losing their families was one of the reasons he had been given rest by his parents so he would avoid being killed.

The process of forming an elite guard took 10 years. However the government was not too fond of the idea. Until the first terrorist attack which was the Aeresol one that had killed 50,000. Full clearance was given to him along with the authority to choose who all enrolled.  5 years later he formally founded his elite guard which would serve to protect the Warrior Humans from all number of physical, mental and magical threats along with threats to their magis organs and spirit energy.

Weapons: http://browse.deviantart.com/?q=Mace&order=9&offset=48#/de6qm9
Equipment: Elixir Recipe and various jewels and potions.
Magic Level:   5
Appearance: http://browse.deviantart.com/?q=Paladin&order=9&offset=72#/d13jxvo
« Last Edit: September 30, 2010, 01:23:29 AM by Odd Dellarobia »

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (And with this I can stop character requests for a while)
« Reply #1 on: September 29, 2010, 07:00:31 PM »
Denied. Expand and elaborate the biography, or reduce his magic level to 2. Your choice.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #2 on: September 29, 2010, 09:26:26 PM »
Denied. Expand and elaborate the biography, or reduce his magic level to 2. Your choice.

I don't think lowering his magic level should have anything to do with this. Expand the biography.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #3 on: September 29, 2010, 09:57:44 PM »
As much as I am for limiting a character's power based upon detail, its not a rule of the forum yet, so we cant deny based on that. Still, it does indeed need to be lengthened, at least to include some actual details about him besides physical and mental ability.
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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #4 on: September 29, 2010, 09:59:11 PM »
I really hope you all know that this is just a tool to try to get rid of the WWB... Its a shame really.
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CDR Tarkov, Zarethian HIRU Agent
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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #5 on: September 29, 2010, 11:35:48 PM »
Fixed him up so he is more than a tool.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #6 on: September 29, 2010, 11:39:06 PM »
I really hope you all know that this is just a tool to try to get rid of the WWB... Its a shame really.
Dah, I know, but I'm a staff member nau, I can't discriminate my approvals. It's not gonna do him much good anyway.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #7 on: September 30, 2010, 12:11:01 AM »
Benjamin South ripoff. denied.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #8 on: September 30, 2010, 12:22:26 AM »
How is he a rip off? Honestly how?

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #9 on: September 30, 2010, 12:55:13 AM »
UnStellar, you are right...Kinda. Its only a certain part at the beginning, though. Sister(EWH Leader)/Wife(Ben) died, guy goes superpowered and proceeds to murder them horribly. I'll give you that. But the rest, honestly, aren't the same unless it was done outside the application for Ben. He isn't a complete rip off, and its only that part that needs to be changed, intentionally ripped or not.
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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #10 on: September 30, 2010, 01:18:27 AM »
Fixed.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #11 on: September 30, 2010, 01:26:25 AM »
I don't like the overall theme of emotional magic. It's like a cheap Paxan. But fine.

...It hasn't been five years since the WWB attack.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #12 on: September 30, 2010, 01:27:36 AM »
1. His magic was EMOTIONAL until he gained control of it. It was, but now it's not.
2. Who said anything about WWB? Grunder also terrorized the Warrior Humans plenty enough as it is.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #13 on: September 30, 2010, 01:51:51 AM »
Fine. Approved.

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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #14 on: September 30, 2010, 08:31:24 AM »
1. His magic was EMOTIONAL until he gained control of it. It was, but now it's not.
2. Who said anything about WWB? Grunder also terrorized the Warrior Humans plenty enough as it is.

Damn striaght... I and im rich off of it too. :D
My Characters
Mark Tepper- lvl 5- CEO of Grunder Ind. -
AI Delta- DAIS Director/Anrufe Member
Supr. Cmndr. Thel Valdamee- Supreme Commander of the Mechera Military/Interim INTERPOL Chairman
Her Grace, the Countess of Gracemaria, Fleet Adm. Aki Sora- Commander of the 3rd Zarethian Fleet
Mark Halsey/Tepper II- High Librarian for the Great Records of Time
Lord Capt. Nathan Church- Vampire, Galactic Inc. Executive VP of Security.
Countess, Tera Mikami- Ruler of New Dementia
Admiral, Regis F Hermitage- Dir. Of the Zarethian Hand
Vice Admiral, Lucien Z. Rychart- Pirate Lord [Zealot]/Demented Prince
Antonio Stradivari, Demonic General of the Army of Hell
AMI, city of Sulvian's AI
Insana, the embodiment of Insanity.

My NPCs-
Lt. General Reginald M. Richards- Zarethian TRADOC Commanding General
Father Resulka- Demented Priest
Mother Kilauea Pele- Manic Priestess
Regent, Octavius- Regent of the City of Insania
CDR Tarkov, Zarethian HIRU Agent
High Seraphim, Grunder Tepper- General of the Armies of Heaven
AI, Marathon- DAIS, MI3 Assistant Director
The Giant Golden Dildo on the Sex Planet aka the Embodiment of Sex (Spoof)



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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #15 on: September 30, 2010, 09:00:24 PM »
As with my previous posts that aren't here anymore...Approved.
Do you have what it takes to change your destiny, to defy FATE itself?
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Re: Rezick T. Dolos (Elite Guard Commander)
« Reply #16 on: February 03, 2011, 06:06:52 PM »
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