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Maya-kohai

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Strained Pulsation
« on: January 12, 2010, 07:19:32 PM »
(This is based on an essay I wrote, so it's part-fact)

The cold air registers, and her eyes snap open. She's not greeted by a familiar face, or the soft aura of light peeking through her bedroom window. Instead, artificial tungsten invades her vision, along with various monitors and lights from machines.

She attempts to speak, but can't. Her words are parried by three hollow plastic cylinders. Vexed by them, she raises her left hand. Three intra-venous lines penetrating the soft skin, how lovely.
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Re: Strained Pulsation
« Reply #1 on: January 12, 2010, 07:23:12 PM »
(Sorry, I had to cut it in half. I'm using a PSP)

She grasps the plastic firmly, and pulls it out. Ever been hit in the neck by a paintball? That's what it felt like, only it was internal. She was alone and in agony, and she expected it.
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Re: Strained Pulsation
« Reply #2 on: January 12, 2010, 07:40:46 PM »
Maya-kohai, the following information is your study plan. Included are the classes you need to take and a basic schedule.

Intermediate
Interaction

Advanced
Literacy
Characterization
Detail

Other Classes You May Want To Take
Beginner Battle
Advanced Don'ts

Please postr a sample post in the forums of all of the listed classes. If you would like, you may take it one class at a time, or alternatively you can take the classes simultaneously. Good luck!
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Re: Strained Pulsation
« Reply #3 on: January 12, 2010, 07:57:48 PM »
Well, you've got basic and intermediate detail, literacy, and characterization down. But, from the sample, we can't really tell for Character Interaction, the Don'ts, or Battle.

And I agree, the character limit on the PSP is rather annoying. I have one myself.
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Seeing the world through a child's eyes is truly a unique experience. It helps you to retrieve that sense of awe, magic and wonder that you lost as you lost your innocence. Tell me, when was the last time that you thought of those childhood dreams? You know, the ones that you used to spend all your time wondering and fantasizing about? Have you forgotten them so easily? Have you forgotten what it felt like to see something for the first time, to see the magic in the mundane? Everyone says you should take the time to 'Stop and smell the roses'. But you should also take the time to look for the fairies, embrace the wind and enjoy the rain. Just once today, stop for a moment and look into that little piece of nature you pass everyday. Perhaps you may see something you did not notice before.

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Re: Strained Pulsation
« Reply #4 on: January 12, 2010, 08:04:17 PM »
Arrgh. Does that mean I have to post another sample?
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Re: Strained Pulsation
« Reply #5 on: January 12, 2010, 08:09:09 PM »
Quote from: Maya-kohai on January 12, 2010, 08:04:17 PM
Arrgh. Does that mean I have to post another sample?
It would be helpful. I apologize for the confusion.
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