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« on: January 24, 2010, 08:47:00 PM »
http://galacticempires.raylon.org/index.php?topic=381.msg3694#msg3694
Since I think this is diplomacy, from its description, I'll go ahead and put it here. As with the one for characterization, I dont wanna feel like I have to post something all diplomatic or whatever, sooo I'll just use the same topic that I got this for.
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Re: Yo
« Reply #1 on: January 24, 2010, 09:43:35 PM »
Character Interaction is about more than just diplomacy. It's about every single interaction between two characters, or even character and him/herself.

So, I read your post, and you seem to have verbal dialogue down, but you don't have body language in at all. Body language is just as important as verbal communication, as it can show intent, emotion, etc. Have you rp'ed with body language included in your posts before?
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Re: Yo
« Reply #2 on: January 24, 2010, 10:13:37 PM »
Hm...Now that you mention it, no, not really. Other than, of course, in a combat post, where they are attacking each other, but I guess that doesn't count.
And I'd only posted Diplomacy since that was apparently my course, accoarding to K2. He'd said just diplomacy. o.o
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Re: Yo
« Reply #3 on: January 24, 2010, 10:40:38 PM »
That was my bad.
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Re: Yo
« Reply #4 on: January 25, 2010, 12:06:15 AM »
It's alright. At the beginning it was just diplomacy, but we ended up broadening it. So, the main thing you need to work on is expressing body language through text. So, I'd like you to take the dialogue between Sara and Hiro and add adequate body language to it.
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Re: Yo
« Reply #5 on: January 26, 2010, 10:34:33 PM »
...Nisorin, Im sorry, I've been having a severe case of Writer's Block across all of the forums Im on, and haven't been able to think up anything. I wanted to get my mind off of it by watching the subbed version of Yugioh GX(something I've been meaning to do; they take stuff out of the dubs for practically all shows; and yes, I am a Yugioh nerd. XP), but I've found it impossible to find nearly anywhere but Youtube(and you KNOW what that site does to quality...), and so I've been so frustrated that coupled with my writers block, I cant think up a single sentence. If I do end up continuing this when the block clears, I'll give you a PM. Again, Im truly sorry about it.
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Re: Yo
« Reply #6 on: January 27, 2010, 12:19:08 AM »
That's alright, we all get writer's block sometime.
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