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Let's Make A Character!
« on: June 29, 2011, 03:13:12 PM »
Alright Hawkeye, get in the damn class. We're trying a different method this time around.  >:(

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #1 on: June 29, 2011, 03:13:30 PM »
Ok. I am here.

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #2 on: June 29, 2011, 03:15:59 PM »
List your characters right here and now!
Give me their name, age, race, gender, and back story only! NOTHING MORE. I don't care what magic they have. How many weapons they possess. And their personality will come later. For now, just give me those things of your current SP characters. Fail to follow this, and you're expelled and on eternal probation.

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #3 on: June 29, 2011, 03:29:18 PM »
I want in too;

Jay, Fucking ancient, Templar, Male, Jay was a traveling magician on Earth before he was picked up by a wandering Templar who saw a spark of temporal talent within him. He chose to give up his human life in return for the eternal life of a Templar. As a Templar Apprentice he was quite close to other apprentices and was very close with his master. He found out about the Templar ascension process which killed any unsuccessful Apprentices. When he became a full Templar he attempted to overthrow the current Elder who was his old master and failed miserably. He was frozen in Time until the death of the last Templar. He was recently unfrozen upon the death of the last Templar and has since been trying to regain the Templar order in his own way with his own new rules.

Skye, again ancient, Embodiment of Space, Female, Skye was a regular mortal with slight spacial power. She doesn't fully remember her life as a mortal before she was chosen to become the Embodiment of Space. Since she became the Embodiment of Space, she began to see Asura as somewhat of an older sister that she felt compelled to cause some form of rivalry between them. When she was not antagonizing Time, Skye has spent a lot of time messing around with Mortals who asked favors of her.

SCOUT, Under a year of age, Robot, Genderless, SCOUT was created to fill the role of it's name; To Scout and to take footage of what it had scouted out. Glitches in it's programming caused it's AI to develop a personality, the engineer hired to iron out the glitches chose to leave them in as he felt that removing the personality would be akin to murder. As SCOUT's personality grew it became more and more curious about the world. Eventually, it was decommissioned and bought by the very engineer who spared it's life; The engineer chose to allow SCOUT to wander the shattered planes in order to properly observe.

That's all three of my characters I think.

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #4 on: June 29, 2011, 03:39:25 PM »
Allen Silver
Age: About 2500, but appears to be in his mid twenties, to be exact 25 years old.
Race: Ancient Narrikian
Gender: Male
Biography:
Unlike his brother Lucas, Allen would not be raised by his parents. They could not afford to raise a second child nor did they care much for the weakling that was Allen as he was nothing like his brother. By age 8, his father had managed to kick him out of the house sending him to get a herb that did not exist. The cruelty led him on a journey of self-discovery and travel. Finding a house to stay in Allen would meet an old man, one of the last of the council.

Pitied by the old man, Allen would be taken under his wing and taught. For weeks Allen performed chores for the man, gathering firewood, chopping it and hunting animals for the meals the man prepared. The council member appreciated the hard working nature of his apprentice and decided he would teach him how to protect himself in case of a situation in which he would need his power.  So for a few months Allen was taught the martial arts, and as it turned out was a natural at using his hands to inflict harm.

Succeeding at teaching his prot?g?   the young Allen Silver the martial arts the council member that had survived many wars and tribulations and trials decided more would be needed. If Allen was to survive he would have a lot more to learn and so physics was taught to Allen along with applied sciences, mathematics and even the study of how to convert existence into the forms that one wished. But the style Allen would have with those techniques would be different from most.

As he learned more about himself his own style became manifest as he would simply let his opponents tire themselves out with pointless strikes, hold back all his energy until the very split second he needed it and then release it for a devastating counter attack on his opponents. The former council member Ragnis knew that Allen would make a great warrior. So he entrusted him with the strongest weapon in his arsenal the Planet Crusher an attack that if not stopped could destroy an entire planet.

Now in the SP-Verse, Allen has only one task. He is to take out the Black Guard and make the civilization of the Narrikians mirror that of their ancient counterparts. But there is a hitch in his plans. You see he does not know even where to begin. So as it seems he has chosen the easiest route and that is by wiping the BG off the galaxy?s face like a pimple and at the same time trying to find out whoever truly leads the Narrikians.

Victor Y Price
Age: 18 weeks, appears to be 18.
Male.
Race: Genetic Experiment.
Biography:
The BG needed a new weapon. So they would try something they had never done before in their lives at all. Scientists plotted and came up with ideas for weeks before a suitable one was chosen to be used, the creation of a new genetic experiment unlike anything they had ever done in the past was the idea that had been chosen. Working around the clock the scientists managed to create a base line dna template for the genetic experiment they were working on. But a base line DNA template alone would not be enough for something such as what they were creating. No, the base line DNA would not be enough by itself and they would need DNA of different races. 

Mercenaries were hired for a mission they did not know of. Various ones including human,  and a few others including Veldorian and Osmosian were implanted inside of this genetic experiment during creation along with the DNA of your run of a mill Narrikian and the DNA of the sub races was also added to the body of this creation. The mercenaries were killed shortly after they had been used as DNA banks for the genetic experiment that would become known far and wide as a terror to the galaxy eventually.

One of the things that would be needed with this creation unlike Silen would be inter-personal skills along with a very high IQ level and so the scientists worked, adding chemicals that would give him a high IQ level without any negative results or so they hoped. Boy were they mistaken. It would indeed have a negative effect in the long run making Victor more evil and wicked than most would normally expect someone created as he had been to be.

The scientists still thought that their creation lacked a lot of things and so work continued on what they dubbed Project Victory. The bones were coated with a liquid form of celestial steel that hardened and fused with the bone structure without making him have a hard time moving or doing anything that he could normally do. In short his bones were now made more durable than normal and he is able for some odd reason to use gravity and magnetism along with other abilities that he should not have access to without the means of technology and science or other things, but he does have these abilities as it was what he was created with, along with an enhanced charisma.


Awoke from the chemicals he was immersed in, Victor was instructed and had information downloaded directly into his mind to save time. As for what was downloaded it was hundreds of decades worth of science and magical knowledge along with research into legendary weapons such as the blade Muramasa, which was given to him by the scientists. They wanted their creation to have a true chance at survival out in the shattered planes. Now he works as an evil genius/enforcer for the BG and a public rep for an orphanage. (Ironic much?)

Jonathan Black
Age : 25
Race: Enhanced Narrikian
Male
Back Story:
A single ship holding a youth crash landed on Earth decades before anyone had invented most of the entertainment earth had. It crash landed near a monastery in Japan. There the pod was opened and inside a sleeping 5 year old was found. The youth was taken in by the monks at the monastery who had learned to unlock the energy of their bodies, and the energy of their minds. Little did they know what the youth was not, namely a human. No the youth happened to be far from human.  And in fact he was not a youth at all. But rather a warrior blessed by several old council members with the ability to live many life times, now only being the latest. Raised by the monks from 5 years old on he was trained in their ways. This group of monks happened to have fighting prowess beyond normal humans. In a sense they were evolved past the normal limits of the human race. It took a while but he mastered 17 styles of martial arts in just a year. Knowing there was something special about the youth they pushed him. His opponents and fights grew tougher as he grew stronger both mentally and physically.   

After a long time the monks had nothing more they could pass onto him. Except of course for the armor that had been assigned to them to protect until someone came who was powerful and honest enough to protect the armor from the wrong hands.  The armor as a result would be given to him as he had proven himself in both of those categories.  On graduation day he took the moniker Shrike to signify his mastery of the arts and his skill at combat.   Eventually he watched television for the first time and took an interest in the shows that involved superheroes made by DC, and the comics made by them. One key thing he learned was to hold every ounce of his power in reserve, and keep his energy signature from being detected by others. Reading a lot of the comics, and noticing the crime rate all over the planet well he decided something had to be done about that. So he went to work and used his skills which he did not know he had to invent a suit for himself. The suit was more like a shinobi outfit with a utility belt and a samurai helmet added to it for good measure.  Fighting crime in various cities, killing the king pins and mafia bosses with his bare hands, Jonathan managed to do some good.

 


Eventually though everyone realizes that some things just are not meant for them in life and for Shrike, the hero business was one of those things. It had been proven that he was too brutal to be a hero and so he hung up the costume of Shrike, donning a more mercenary oriented version of Shrike.  Inspiring many mercenaries and vigilantes he decided that remaining on earth would do no good. So he cobbled together a ship from the scraps of his, and Nasa technology as outdated as it was it did the trick. He got into space safely and without much harm to himself. Finding another ship he forced the crew except for the captain and the chef to leave the ship. Of course he let them live, sending them to where he used to be on earth. Now loose in the galaxy he seeks to make a name for himself as the most powerful mercenary out there. 



However he met Yuki who offered him a dragon partner for some information or rather, her dragoness did. Said dragon partner was killed however by the actions of K2323 rather permanently. Such an event caused a large change to occur in Jonathan and his personality entirely reformatted itself. Now he is cold and distant instead of being friendly and warm. Also he is more brutal than he was before he had a dragon partner. His new form he inhabits is also well suited to using magic. He has the potential now with the proper training to surpass even the sage three in terms of magic. Currently he seeks ways to improve his magical skill. The transfer put him in the body of a dead Narrikian who had a lot of magical power when he was alive, so obviously he would be powerful. Yet he has not fully gotten used to this new form that he inhabits.

Oblivion
Age: 18, but he is far older than that.
Race: Cyborg-Narrikian
Male
Bio: He was created in a lab by a scientist in a time of war when a weapon would be needed to turn the tide and was a weapon that was created. The body of a dying warrior was fused with cyborg parts and made into the weapon that would be Oblivion. Only the creator noticed some irregularities when his wife got infected with nanites that redirected her magic to Oblivion.
Trying to shut down his creation, but failing the scientist was killed by Oblivion along with the wife and Oblivion began to invent things on his own. Now he is loose in the SP-verse once more but who knows what will happen.
(All I remember of him)

Lucien Dolos
Age: 21 now, or at least appearance wise. Not sure on actual age.
Race: Ancient Narrikian
Male
Bio:
The son of Rezick, he was not pampered in life and was taught to live a basic life style with only what he would need. The utilitarian training would help him when the EG fell under the distinct surveillance of Thel, and then was disbanded. For a time he was viewed as a terrorist until Ezra cleared him of the charges. Now as the emperor to be, he is training in the white room and hoping things will go according to plan.
He has access to the white room and has only began to tap into the secrets there and also make his own artifacts as well which when he is old and gray headed will put in the white room for the future generations of Dolos.
(Hope I got it right)

Aseron Lustre
Age: 36
Race: Zarethian
Male
Bio:
One of the less fortunate canidates, Lustre would not have the money needed to get involved in the senate campaign unless someone helped him. But someone did, that someone being Ezra as Ezra offered Aseron a deal, limit the power of Interpol in your senate and in exchange get all the funds that you need to assist you. The deal was struck, and so it began. (All I remember)


Zane Valatako
Sage
Age 1000, but appears to be in his mid thirties/early twenties.
Male
Bio:
Unlike most sages he would be raised on the planet Elmora instead of the normal worlds and so his magic sort of adapted to that of the elementals there. His father was a great hero to the planet and stopped an evil that had plagued it. Only, he failed in the long run and so it would fall to Zane to take over for him and so Zane did.
(All I remember)


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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #5 on: June 29, 2011, 03:57:54 PM »
How am I supposed to know your characters if you don't even know some of your characters? Already you're failing. Oh whatever. If anyone else wants in this class, just join in whenever.

Alright. Last time in Characterization, Hawkeye. We discussed motives and they are what makes a character who they are. What builds their personality, and what causes them to act the way they act and live the way they live. ...Even then you failed. So this time we're going to try an entirely different way to bring our characters to life. Since you obviously can't tell me the lives of your characters. I'm going to have them tell me.

It's sharing time!

The setting is a room. A table with two chairs on one side, and two chairs on the other. Other chairs line the walls, the amount is just enough to accommodate everyone. The room is just about big enough to fit in everyone, but no bigger than that. There is one door. Lets have it resemble a police interrogation room. There is no clock, and unless one of your characters happens to have a watch on, there is no way to tell the time or what day it is.

In the two chairs on the one side of the tablet. I want yourselves. This DOES NOT mean your online persona or your offline person. It means you yourself no matter how many personas you have. Combine them. Just put yourself there.

In the other side of the table,sitting accross from you  is a character.  This is left up to you to decide who, just one of your characters.  It's your scene, it's your choice. Your other characters are sitting in line against the wall with the rest. That should be in your scene and pointed out, but your main focus is the table.

Your character is going to open up. From this we hope to learn, their status quo (aka normal everyday life), their backstory from THEIR side. (Remember as a writer we write their backstory. But as our character we are biased towards things in our backstory. As there are always two sides.) Their goals and aspirations, and anything else you can get them to tell you.

But as all characters aren't talkative chatterboxes, and if their personality is the suspicious type? That's okay too. We won't learn as much then. That's not the point. The point of this exercise is to not have you control your character and put through it your will. But for you to be a spectator and let your characters will come out on its own. Don't write it how you want it written as the person controlling. But how your character would ACTUALLY ACT, SAY, and FEEL.

When the interrogation is over, I want you to have them empty their pockets, bags, backpacks, whatever they carry. And define their life through the objects they had by analyzing why they would be carrying such. As in IRL, we don't carry things pointless to us unless it serves a reason. In character, it should serve reason as well.

You are the interrogator. Your character is the suspect.
Get to writing.

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #6 on: June 29, 2011, 04:22:27 PM »
"So, Mr...Stryder, is it?" An 18 year old young man sits a table in a well-lit room. Across from him is what appears to be a 21 year old young man wearing a hat and a black cloth jacket. Sat in a chair to their right is a woman in a black dress with seemingly a small robot sat in her lap, intently watching the conversation at the table.
"My name's James and well, I created you." The 18 year old introduced himself, putting on a pair of aviator shades yet still smiling warmly "So Jay, you're gonna tell me about yourself and we'll see if there's anything I don't know eh?"
Jay folded his arms, looking at the kid before him "Yeah whatever man." The Templar chuckled, rolling his eyes "What d'you wanna know?"
"Well, tell me about your day to day life I guess mate."
"I wake up, I deal with idiots and then I go to bed" Jay laughed, staring intently into the shades of the man 'interrogating' him. Suddenly the shades were on his face. "Of course there are some days shit gets real and I actually have to work but hey, comes with the job yo."
"You're a bastard. I like that" James grins, putting on a new pair of shades "Tell me some of your history or something recent then."
"Last Templar, fucked with some sages recently, getting sick of this Plex bullshit that's running around." The Templar shrugged.
"That was...Brief." James sighed, marking off a criteria on a list he was holding "Last question; What are your plans?"
"Templars. Lots of them"
"Right... I guess. This sort of works. You're free to go. Next?"
Jay stood, emptying his pockets and equipment upon the desk before him.
On the desk now were a long bronze broadsword, a wristband, a hat, a wallet filled with ancient money and old photographs, a pen and a piece of paper with a doodle on it.
« Last Edit: June 29, 2011, 04:44:06 PM by Jeebus »

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #7 on: June 29, 2011, 04:29:47 PM »
A room, a room devoid of much but pure white and two tables and chairs was one that was entered by someone new that had not been seen much as of late. For he had been away, training and he sat down with the person that would write his memoirs for him. Future generations would not make the same mistakes that Lucien had, and that was why the memoir writer was here. Sitting down, he began to relate his past to the people around him. On his wrist was a watch and in his pocket was a galaxy phone that he kept with him. Normally he would not open up, but this was for the future. His future and those of whatever kids he decided to have.

"So you want to know about my past? I'll tell you then."

With that Lucien closed his eyes and focused, drawing up memories of his past. Determining which ones would be safe for the memoir writer to publish, and once he finished he opened his eyes again. There were others in the room and he would have to take care to make sure they would not hear what he said and so he held out his hand concentrating. A foggy sphere of energy formed in it, forming over the table he was in as a dome that would be sound proof. Others would not hear what he said unless they managed to undo the dome.


"I'll admit my past wasn't the best of one. For starters when I was young.....I was picked on a lot." Water hit the ground coming from his eyes as he remembered the painful and predatory days of school that he had to deal with. The bullies who were always stronger than him until one day when he got his book and things changed for the better. The water hitting the ground stopped. "And then I got my book. " He said as he took the book out and put it on the table in front of him.

"The day I got my book was a normal one like any other. I went to school and got picked on and came home. But on this particular day I decided to explore the attic, and I found something neat. A chest of items that were my dad's. Exploring the chest, I found the book and when I touched it something happened, and well then I changed a little. I became more courageous and ready to deal with the mess. The next day I went, I did not get beat up but the opposite happened, the bullies got their own medicine."

 More information would be needed than what he had just given. "At first I was over-joyed that I had managed to turn the tables. But it angered dear old dad that I had raided his stash of items and so he punished me by sending me to a different school, one geared to training me to fight. On the way there I was disappointed, but would eventually realize it was for the best."

"I see, and does this make you angry?" asked the memoir writer (myself) as he turned his attention to the others in the room for a moment.
If steam could blow out of one?s ears it would, steam literally blew out of the ears of Lucien as a fireball the size of a dodgeball formed in the his hands, which he proceeded to lob at the one interrogating him now, not feeling like answering any more pointless and stupid questions. His voice was tight and tense as he exclaimed in a thunderous voice.
"Enough!"

The Memoir Writer, Hawkeye fled for cover when the fireball materialized and was lobbed at him headed for the exit to the room. The next time he created a character it would not be an insane magic user. Of that much he was certain.

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #8 on: June 29, 2011, 04:51:20 PM »
*sigh*

Hawkeye:...
1. Your character switched from bullying to anger in an instant. Normally unless someone has borderline or BiPolar disorder, moods would not switch this fast. ESPECIALLY that extent of anger. Unless your character has such disorders, remember this. At the moment it seems like you as the writer forced this emotion.
2. Said character came in already expecting interrogation and knowing you wanted to know the past. This is metagaming, the character should not know you were going to do past right away. You as the writer knows this, the characters should not.
3. You forgot items, aspirations, fears, and other such information. And you still don't know his everyday life.  However the session was cut short by his attack, but still you should be persistent. This is your character we're talking about. You as the writer want to make friends as best you can. Unless you've tortured them, then they may want to exact revenge upon you (but that's coming later.)
Grade: C-

Jeebus:
1.Good characterization. But remember, this room is not empty and you were put in with Hawk and his characters for a reason. Usually this can effect people, depending on character personality. Whether if effects yours or not, I don't know. But keep this in mind next time. Some characters will tense up or refuse to talk in front of others. And others may look around. Just keep in mind that there are others in the room.
2. You forgot to have the items be talked about and why they're important or carried, or such. Just knowing what they are gives us nothing but speculation. And now your reader would probably be left wondering.
Grade: B


Alright, both of you write the next scene of the interrogation. Whether you keep the same character or move on to the next. Keep in mind for this though, that EVERYTHING AROUND will have some effect on people. It does in real life, and in character it should as well. To the setting of the room, the others around, the feel of the air, or vibes of the area. Or even the chairs and table its self. These are just a few examples to a wide array of things that effect the way characters act, react, or feel....

It's not just, sit, talk, and give a few facial expressions. These are emulated to be real people in a real setting with your real selves at their side!

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #9 on: June 29, 2011, 05:06:23 PM »
Lucien put his items on the table this time after he had calmed down. The senseless violence he had attempted to make disgusted him. His doctors and psychologist had diagnosed him with bi-polar disorder or rather, anger disorder. It meant he would be angry a lot, and that was something he did not like to have to deal with. Still, though this situation called for matters to be dealt with and so they would be dealt with in the best possible manner.
His eyes closed for a moment, Lucien opened them once more but now unlike at other times his anger was gone, now calm had set in, a complete tranquility. It would be time for him to begin once more and continue with the interrogation. Snapping his fingers he dissolved the sound proof barrier and re-absorbed the fragments of the energy it left behind.

The chairs that were around reminded him of the ones that he had back at his new home, or rather the room that served as his home, the white room. Those were good memories to him and as he remembered them he relaxed to a degree. But then he looked at the table and absently began to scratch a symbol into it, that of the IG. Eventually he would reform them, but he did not know it had already happened.

After that he had put some items on the table that had value to him. The first item was a PDA that was black and silver and had the symbol of the EG on the back of it. Inside of the PDA was all the files the white room had, and everything he had learned from the white room.  As it seemed, the PDA was his journal of sorts.

Out of his pockets came a small handle as well, a beam weapon that he always carried with him because he never knew when it might come in handy. With as many problems throughout the dimension as there were including groups like the Anrufe and what not, Lucien would have to eventually deal with them and so he hoped he would be prepared. The very thought of killing said groups was enough to bring a smirk to his face.

The memoir writing outfit clad form of Hawkeye re-entered. "So this item holds symbolism to you?" He asked, looking at the PDA.

Lucien had a serene expression on his place. He had calmed down and relaxed. Looking at the PDA he began to say. "My training, and entry to the white room is all recorded onto the PDA, so OF COURSE it would have value!"

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #10 on: June 29, 2011, 05:34:23 PM »
"WHAT THE FUCK" Both Jay and James shouted simultaneously as the fireball flow across the room from the other table "Could you do me a damn favor and not throw fire around the room, please?" James mentioned to the other 'interrogator'.
"Jay, before you go could you shine some light on this weird ass stuff you have?"
"Whatever" Jay muttered, sitting back down. "The Sword is kinda...Special." He glanced sideways at the other people in the room; Not a chance in hell he was letting anyone really know about the sword of ages or the Hook for that matter "Same with the bracelet. These chairs suck by the way."
"Yeah, I know" James sighed, folding his arms himself "How about the other crap?"
"The hat's a fucking trademark." The Templar lifted the hat off the desk and replaced it upon his head "The wallet...It's just uh..." He trailed off, taking the wallet off of the desk and putting it back in his pocket. It was all he had left to remind him of his life as a Human and his general family. Quickly perking up again and picking up the pen Jay grinned. Suddenly, everyone in the room aside from Jay had a moustache drawn on them. The woman in the black dress in the seat to the side muttered something angrily before the ink on her face faded. The robot seemingly did not notice, it didn't exactly have a face anyway.
"Pen and paper is for when I get bored."
With that, the Templar kicked back and put his legs up on the table before him "So why don't you tell me about yourself"
"Hell no man."

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« Reply #11 on: June 29, 2011, 05:38:44 PM »
Oooooh...

Kallen Corvis
Age: 303
Race: Zarethian
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Bio:
Born to Addler vas Vacon and her as of yet unamed mother she was born on Addler's home planet. She was raised with her mother and brother as they moved around empire, following her father. She didnt often have time with her father, a fact that began to cause resentment towards him during her later adult years. She joined the Zarethian Navy when she was old enough and became known as a very skilled captain of frigate sized vessels. She wanted to fight the Lorcar when the invasion came but followed her orders reluctantly as her father ordered their retreat from the sector. She blamed him. Later this resentment and the added stress of the invasion caused a schism between father and daughter. She went off and formed her own band of pirate raiders and began to plunder the stars. Eventually she became part of the UPA.

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Addler was born to farming parents on the outerrim territoy of Letol. He stayed with his parents for a matter of time until pirate raiders attacked and murdered them. He then joined the Zarethian military and became widely known as the best ship commander and tactician in the fleet. When the Lorcar attacked he became the high admiral of the fleet and ordered a tactical retreat. They fled for three hundred years and he organized plenty of instituitions in the fleet. After the Landing he became the Hand of the Council.



Kallen: Why the hell am I here?
Me: You're here to answer some questions.
Kallen: Why?
Me: Because someone is interested. You're not getting out of here until you do so I suggest you answer them.
Kallen crosses her arms and leans back in the chair. Her eye brows are raised.
Kallen: Fine. What do you want?
Me: Whats your history?
Kallen sighs and leans back further.
Kallen: I was born on a planet a long time ago. I joined the military. It wasnt for me. The rules, regulations, you know. That shit. I took my crew and several other ships and turned to piracy. Been at it ever since.
Kallen shrugs.
Me: What about the UPA?
Kallen: What about them?
Me: What are your ties?
Kallen: Its a loose group of pirate buddies. Other than that I've got nothing to tell you.
Her stance is hostile.
Me: Alright then.. What about goals? Apirations?
Kallen: I want money. I want my crew alive.
Me: Fun activities?
Kallen: I like to fight. To test myself.
Me: Anything else?
Kallen: Nope.
Me: What do you do for everyday life?
Kallen: Train to fight harder, be better. Tactics.
She was lieing at least a little.
Me: What do you fear?
Kallen: Not getting out of this fucking place.
Me: Can you empty your pockets and everything?
Kallen looks at me with disdain, slightly angry. She gets up. She is wearing a black long sleeved jacket over a blue utility shirt. Her pants were dark grey.  She emptied her pockets onto the table. The contents were a small notebook and a pen attached to it. It had dates and notes scibbled on it. She emptied a dagger onto the table along with a small pistol.  She also emptied a flask, half full, some playing cards and a galaxyphone.
Kallen: happy now?
Me: Whats the pen for?
Kallen: So I dont forget.
Me: Alright. Please sit down.
She looked at me with some resentment as she put her items in their places. She walked back and didnt even look at Addler.
Kallen: "Should have killed you with these..." She muttered.


"Addler can you come up here please?" I ask.
A late middle aged man, looking like he was fifty got up out of his chair and came to sit down in the one in front of me.
"Hello Addler."
"Hello Mr...?" He asked.
"Wangler." I replied.
He nodded. "Nice to meet you." He replied.
"Alright Addler. Can you give me your personal story?" I ask.
He shrugged. "Sure. I'll give you the condensed version. I was born on a Zarethian world some five hundred forty years ago. My parents were poor famers. It wasnt a prosperous life but it was alright. Then pirates attacked, killed my parents and I joined the military.  I was pretty good and soon enough I was promoted. I became the high commander during the invasion of a horrible alien species... Lots of people died then." He paused a moment, zoning out. "But, after three hundred years of running we found a home. I found a home."
I nod. "Anything you like to do?"
"Read. Train in the tac sim rooms." He said simply.
"What is your career?" I ask.
"I am the highest military leader in the Zarethian Empire. I also have to do some... politicing." He said. He put a negative emphasis on the politics.
"Any ambitions?"
"To keep my people safe. Thats it." He said shrugging. He was in a relaxed stance, unphased by the interrogation. "I've already got the highest postition available to me."
"What do you do everyday?"
"I train, read, work strategies. Sometimes I have enough free time to surf the outernet for a while... Mostly I work."
"Please empty your pockets." I told him.
He complied nonchalantly. He had a holopad in his pocket, a galaxyphone, a small ring and a crystal.
"Whats with the ring and the crystal?"
"My wedding ring and a crystal from my homeworld."
"Alright, thank you. Please sit down."
"Okay."  He said, putting his objects into his pockets and walking to sit on the far side of Kallen.
« Last Edit: June 29, 2011, 05:43:12 PM by Zak »
There is only so much pain that can be taken before the bonds and chains of sanity are forsaken
It is in these lonesome times that we reach towards the light sublime
And from that light we pull the resolution of our time
To begin the end and start anew

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #12 on: June 29, 2011, 05:53:49 PM »
Hawkeye:
I didn't say to make him bipolar. I was just saying people don't generally switch moods that fast unless they are. This does not mean take every reprimand someone gives you and add it to your character as this just puts too much stuff into them. Take their reprimands as advice and learn from it for later or take it into consideration for improving. Don't just add it on!
You're also not sticking to yourself. I highly doubt you act that on a day to day basis especially when your character is throwing fire at you. Yes this is about your character in characterization. But at the same time if you can't play your own personality you sure as hell can't create the personalities of others. Get yourself in character to improve your characters character.
Grade: C

Jeebus:
I see nothing wrong now.
Grade: A

Zak: ...
Past Tense 3rd person, please.
Also.. NO SCRIPT FORMAT FOR ANY REASON.
Characterization seemed good except you didn't take note of others in the room or any of the setting. It was just question, answer, expression. We need more than that.
Grade: C

Now! Ask your characters what they think of you as their creator. Whether this is hate, love, worship, it's not up to YOU to decide. It's up to THEM to decide. In this you are not your character, they are themselves. You're just putting life into them.

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Re: Let's Make A Character!
« Reply #13 on: June 29, 2011, 06:11:54 PM »
"So Jay" James looked over at the Templar, wiping off the mustache from his face "Tell me, man to man, badass to badass; What do you think of me?"
Jay grinned "I thought you'd never ask. You're a sick motherfucker for coming up with MY fucked up life but hey, my life right now is pretty good so I guess it's just karma or whatever yo." He smiled, holding his sword somewhat...Menacingly "If i'm honest I oughta kick your ass for not giving me a happier life but really I pity your ass for having nothing better to do than to come up with mine" He laughed "Nah, we're cool yo."
"Fuck you man."

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« Reply #14 on: June 29, 2011, 06:15:02 PM »
Well, by the time I posted you guys posted five times. I didnt really have much to go on. Plus you said for us to be the interagators so meh.

"Kallen, can you come back up here please?" Zak asked, still sitting at the table. Kallen got up, glanced worriedly at the two crazy people throwing flames all over the place and sat down at the table across from Zak.
"What?" She asked tersely.
"What do you think of me, your creator?" Zak asked mildly.
Kallen looked at him and laughed. "You? My creator?" She chortled but then quietened when she saw that Zak was quite serious. "Well, I could say I fucking hate you for a handfull of reasons including the Invasion, my parents and that kind of stuff.... And you put me here. Did you make everything about me?" She asked, curiousity getting the better of her.
"Yes. From your appearance to your history, to your personality, weapons and crew." Zak answered, leaning back in his chair.
"Well..." Kallen began, scratching her chin. "I guess you didnt do anything extremely drastic... I know you could have made me a lot worse.. A lot more flawed..." She pondered this for a moment before speaking up. "I suppose that... though you did some shitty stuff to me... You're not too bad..."
Zak nodded, pleased. "Alright. Thank you, can you go back and sit down again?"
Kallen glared at him. "Again? Now this is just cruel." She said sarcastically as she sauntered off towards her seat, scooting it far away from the other, really odd people. Before she sat down she looked at him. "Do anything else and I might have to come back and I might have to come back here in a very bad mood." She warned.
Zak motioned for Addler to come up again. Addler sighed exashperatedly and got up. He walked over and sat down in the chair. "Yes?" He asked.
"What would be your opinion of me if I was your creator?" Zak asked him.
Addler folded his arms and leaned back. "You're not God." He said after a moment.
"No, I'm not. But say this was some sort of fictional universe and I was the writer." Zak explained.
Addler leaned his head back. "Well, I'd say you're a fucking bastard for one." Addler started, glaring at Zak in the eyes. "My wife died. My daughter," He lowered his voice with a sad glance at Kallen who was tapping her foot in the far chair. "Hates my guts and billions of people died because of you. And we have all this damn trouble to deal with...." He said angrily. It was almost a snarl towards the end. "But... We still have plenty of people left. We have ships and planets... and overall people are happy. I guess... maybe you arent too bad. You're still a bastard though." He said matter of factly.
"Alright. Thank you Addler. Please go back and sit down in your chair." Zak said.
Addler got up slowly and strolled over to his chair in the middle, hoping to avoid the fire throwing guys and Lucien.
Zak nodded and let him continue.
« Last Edit: June 29, 2011, 06:18:04 PM by Zak »
There is only so much pain that can be taken before the bonds and chains of sanity are forsaken
It is in these lonesome times that we reach towards the light sublime
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« Reply #15 on: June 30, 2011, 01:00:56 PM »
Finally after a period of arguing with himself, Hawkeye decided that he would continue the interrogation but first went and got one of those fire proof outfits that fire fighters often wore and put it on over his clothing. Walking back into the room with Lucien he asked. "What are your thoughts on me if I were to say I was your inventor?"

Wait, someone had invented him. The entire universe was a work of fiction. This was something that it would be hard for Lucien to grasp. Frowning, he thought of his past and the memories of the death of Rezick and all the other things that had gone on. If what this man was saying was true, then he deserved to pay dearly, very dearly for the madness he had caused. So it would be wise if Lucien were to hurt him and hurt him a lot. However, since his creator or inventor was also responsible for a lot of good things that had happened in his life, he would not hurt him yet.

"Well I can?t say that I particularly like you for what you have put me through, what with the death of my parents, and getting me as a wanted fugitive for Interpol. Still though if it weren?t for you I never would have found the white room or existed. So I guess I am not sure how I actually feel about you at the moment."

"Go back to your seat." Slowly, Lucien obediently walked back over to his seat not wanting to find out what his inventor might do to him if he did not comply with this demand, and sat down.   

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« Reply #16 on: June 30, 2011, 01:14:46 PM »
..No fire suits. This is a LOCKED room. No closets. No pocket dimensions, no getting out. Which just shows, Hawkeye, you have a problem with reading what people put. As is obvious in RP posts where you miss large chunks of the obvious. When reading posts or instructions, read over it at least 3 times. Once to skim to get the gist of things. Second thoroughly to really see what was written and ABSORB it. And third to make sure there was nothing you missed.

Like if you cared to notice I said one table. Not two. Moving on...

Jeebus and Zak: A. Hawk: B, I'm still not entirely convinced you act like that.

Now! It's 20 question time!
Each of you pick one character of what was interrogated. It doesn't have to be your own. However if it's already been picked, pick another.
Once characters have been chosen. Write up 20 questions you have for each of the characters chosen. (There should be three) Which means you should have 60 questions. If you can do this in IM or IRC, that'd be great. If not, make a new topic for it with the person. Just title it "Q/A with: Character Name"

These should not just be random questions. The point is to pick out flaws you see in the characters and further question to find out more and get the character to have to flesh themselves out more. Therefore your questions should be of the intent to bring out more of the character. So.. NO collaborating behind the scenes before questioning.

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« Reply #17 on: June 30, 2011, 01:41:16 PM »
"Addler, I will be questioning you." said Hawkeye, as he looked over at the Zarethian dignitary. Not how he wanted to spend his day, but well he didn't have much else to do so what the heck. He would question Addler and learn more about him and the Zarethians.

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« Reply #18 on: June 30, 2011, 01:43:27 PM »
"Sup, psychopath. You're mine I guess" James motioned to Lucien. He began to write questions, wary of any fireballs thrown towards his face.
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« Reply #19 on: June 30, 2011, 01:49:17 PM »
"Alright, Jay. That leaves me with you." Zak said cheefully putting his notes in his bag.

Addler stared at the man coldly for a moment. Then he shrugged. "Fine."
« Last Edit: June 30, 2011, 01:56:56 PM by Zak »
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« Reply #20 on: July 05, 2011, 01:13:01 PM »
Instead of stopping everything and doing the 20 questions assignment. Just do that one periodically throughout the other assignments until it's done. At the rate it's going it's going to take forever. And as a teacher I have no patience. I have more things to teach!

Though the 20 Questions assignment so far has shown me where to go next and what certain people are lacking.

Next assignment! This one is more directed towards you as the roleplayer. We know your characters goals. But now the character needs to know what their creators goals are. And by RP goals I mean, why are you in the roleplay. What do you hope to achieve if anything. If you could do one thing in this RP, what would it be and why. Think of your own questions as well.

Same scenario and setting as when you asked your characters, just flipped.

Go!
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« Reply #21 on: July 05, 2011, 01:21:38 PM »
In the same room as before, the roles had been reversed. This time it was Lucien who was serving the role of the interrogator and Hawkeye who was sitting on the table and being questioned. This time around however it was about the goals that Hawkeye, who Lucien thought was his inventor had for him and so it would begin with a simple question.


"What are your goals for me during the roleplay inventor?"
 
Considering the question for a few minutes, Hawkeye closed his eyes. Thinking and taking a deep breathe he thought of all the problems that had been caused by Lyoko222 and his characters for Lucien and others that he had created. It would be torturous to answer this in a way that would not enrage his creation to the point of using magic again. Still, he would have to give it a shot. Opening his eyes again, he began to speak.
 
"Well I planned on you eventually becoming emperor when the time was right, and evolving. But you seem to have done a well enough job of that on your own. Congrats on no longer being Narrikian, I will need to correct the flaw that leaves them vulnerable to bio-weapon technologies at some point. " But as of now he would need to think more clearly and so he pulled out from his pocket the small notepad on which he had written his goals for his characters. Flipping through it, he found the ones for Lucien and smiled. "You wanted to know what my goals were for you?"

"Yes..." said Lucien, mildly exasperated that he could not be given a straight answer.

"Well, my goals were for you to become emperor, stop being possessed and instead fuse with your item, become the newest member of a long lost race, and be immune to everything that could in a biological sense previously harm you."

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« Reply #22 on: July 05, 2011, 01:33:38 PM »
"Right" Skye sat down at the table, facing James "I discussed it with Asura's lackey and the uh robot thing. Clearly i'm the best for this" She smiled at her 'creator' "I'm to ask you questions"
"Sure." James leaned forward on the desk, he had nothing to hide after all.
"Why did you make us? I mean...What do you have to gain from this?" Space asked, looking across the room to the other two 'creators' there.
"You're gonna hate this" The young man replied, fidgeting with his hands a little "I got bored. There's really no purpose other than to occupy my time."
Skye was somewhat taken aback here; Was she really to believe that her very existence was the product of this guy's boredom?!
"I said you'd hate it." James sighed, continuing "But that's not to say I don't care greatly about all three of you. You, Jay and SCOUT. I do give a shit."
Skye was still shaken but she pressed on "What are your goals for us?"
"For the lot of you? A happy life I guess. I want you to continue to run Space awesomely, I want Jay to start the Order like he wants to and I want SCOUT to..." James stopped there...He didn't actually know what he wanted from SCOUT "Well, I want SCOUT to live." He smiled.

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« Reply #23 on: July 05, 2011, 01:42:20 PM »
Zak can just catch up. I'm impatient.

Alright, as there seems to be a mixup in lessons due to someone misinterpreting. (HAWKEYE) The assignment just now was the characters asking their creators goals for THEM.

Now since that one was done this time, we're going back to what the assignment was supposed to be for now.
Your characters needs to ask YOUR goals. Not goals for them. But why you are roleplaying. What YOU as the roleplayer want to get out of this roleplay. And if you could do one thing in Shattered Planes what would it be and why.

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« Reply #24 on: July 05, 2011, 02:03:36 PM »
"If you could change one thing about this... Roleplay" She uttered the last word in disgust "What would it be?"
"Nothing" James replied confidently "Nothing whatsoever."
"Then I don't get it!" Skye was getting ridiculously flustered here "Why do you come along and toy with our lives? What gives you the right?"
James sighed... The folly of meeting his creation... "I'm sorry, Skye. I really am."