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Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« on: April 19, 2012, 12:02:55 PM »
Character Name: Atama Darkening
Age: Unknown
Gender: Male
Race: Same race as Akida.
Appearance: Whatever the host he is in control of looks like. He can be recognized though by glowing red eyes.
Alliance: None
Personality (one paragraph minimum): Evil. Twisted. Calculating. Chaotic Neutral at times. Puppet master like.
Combat Level (Average of magic level and physical strength. If you don't know what to do here, don't fill it out and the staff will help you.): 4.5
- Magic  Level: 5
- Physical Strength: 6
Character's History (Minimum 3 Paragraphs): Known as the Demon of Bodies. Atama is much like Akida. He was in fact created by Akida using magic. Akida knowing that he could not successfully destroy the universe alone created Atama to have powers opposite of his own. Atama deals with control of the physical aspect while Akida deals with the soul.

Atama's biggest power is the fact that he is able to take dead bodies, ones who were affected by Akida and reanimate them under his control. He also can sometimes take control of others who are under Akida's influence though it drains more out of him.

In the past Atama was known as a champion to some because he complete stopped an invasion on a planet, of course three weeks later he managed to burn the civilization to the ground. Out of the three he is more likely to do something right away. His planned traps have always made him dangerous but at times he shows compassion. Many speculate (If they lived long enough to.) that when Akida created him he wanted Atama to represent both good and evil in hopes of preparing for an ultimate war.

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« Last Edit: April 23, 2012, 09:51:09 AM by Logan »

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #1 on: April 20, 2012, 09:23:00 AM »
Necromancer, eh? Approved.
Do you have what it takes to change your destiny, to defy FATE itself?
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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #2 on: April 20, 2012, 09:26:31 AM »
-.- God are you even reading the requests?

ONE FUCKING paragraph personality for the last time. You're not getting around that.
"Same race as Akida is," well seeing as Akida isn't completely approved you need to request that race.

ALSO I want an RP sample from you.

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #3 on: April 20, 2012, 09:33:10 AM »
Yes I'm reading the requests. I just don't feel that its always necessary. Sure he could put it in paragraph form, but it says essentially says the same thing, especially if he isn't actually certain how the character would act in all situations. He's put a few personality traits that broadly define the character's personality, so we generally know how he's intended to be used, and its up to the RPer to define his actions in specific circumstances.
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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #4 on: April 20, 2012, 09:34:14 AM »
It's a shorter request than fucking Hawkeye. He didn't work on it AT ALL.

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #5 on: April 21, 2012, 10:03:52 PM »
It's a shorter request than fucking Hawkeye. He didn't work on it AT ALL.
Your half way right. I covered Atama in the topic a little, so I didn't want to repeat information, and as for the history I haven't yet worked out all the problems. I also think I'm going to come up with more historic lore, mythological lore, and things like that to cover them. At the same time everything about this character is the same as Akida, it would be stupid to repeat the same data entry while I'm still trying to establish this character. And another problem was I had to do the history bio in about 4 minutes til my ride left, so that itself didn't help.

And another problem is I wouldn't know exactly what to put as a History. Think about it. The only people who have seen these three have all ended up dead. No one would know who they are or what they have done. It would be pointless to come up with a page worth of stuff when IC no one is going to know a thing about it. Think about it this way. Would you tell your life story to someone you are about to slaughter? The lack of History is simply because it is the lack of what would be living people to tell us about it. The only reason I came up with this much is because a little bit of information would have survived with the survivors of the galaxy they destroyed with Ally and Teran in it.

This isn't anything like when I made Logan and how me and K2 were going to rp what happened out. This is simply a matter of there will be no history of these characters. I have posted their special abilities out side of basic magic. Everything is there unless they grow IC.

He is the same race as Akida because Akida made him to be like him. In the end their race doesn't actually matter because Akida isn't like the way he is because it is a racial ability. He is from magic. For all we know he could have once been human. He could have been a phoenix, who knows. He no longer holds a race because he isn't natural anymore. Their race isn't even important. Would knowing what race they were would make a difference? Cause if I would have to bet I would say Akida was probably human at some point. Considering he first appeared in a human galaxy. But as I pointed out. No one else would be alive to say where he was originally from. I don't know how else to explain this.

I ask you this. What is the point of adding a bunch of useless information onto the history that wouldn't make a difference to anything? It may give you an understanding of them, but it wouldn't matter because your character wouldn't know that information IC, and if you did it would be Metagaming.

If you actually read the topic about the mythology of these three you will see my own creative work. Lets not push it with unnecessary details.
« Last Edit: April 21, 2012, 11:16:59 PM by Logan »

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #6 on: April 21, 2012, 11:20:15 PM »
If you have no history then leave them as NPCs. There's no point in us approving a character we know nothing about or isn't developed.

If it's not developed and you request it solely to use as plot trigger than that character is a tool. Therefore, NPC or no approval.

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #7 on: April 21, 2012, 11:21:47 PM »
Combat Level (Average of magic level and physical strength. If you don't know what to do here, don't fill it out and the staff will help you.): 4.5
- Magic  Level: 5
- Physical Strength: 6

Sorry Logan, I like you and all, but  that should be 5.5 rather than 4.5...
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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #8 on: April 21, 2012, 11:29:29 PM »
The combat level has nothing to do with strength and magic first off. Just because you are strong doesn't mean you can fight. Atama is strong, and his necromancy is strong. But he isn't a fighter. 4.5 is based on how well he would actually whole up in combat. Ally was a level 0 for combat level but her magic level was high. She doesn't fight so her combat level would not be based on her magic level. When I put there combat level it is simply how well they will do in a head to head battle.

Atama isn't a tool for a plot device. He may be a big part in one but that doesn't mean he should be an npc. If anything Teran is the npc.

Just because I don't have a history for the character right now means that that they should be npc. I gave the basic layout of the character. If I decided to release more history then I will (Which during my down time at work I'm working on another story of them.). The history isn't going to change the character in anyway shape or form. As I pointed out their history doesn't matter. There won't be any person IC who would know their History, except Ally, so it wouldn't really matter.

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #9 on: April 21, 2012, 11:30:49 PM »
It's still short and undevloped. NPC the idiot until you have it developed enough for a character. Because all I see right now is a tool. That's my final say on it.

ALSO, Asura would know their history. The Templars would. Any embodiment around their time would. So yes, many would.
« Last Edit: April 21, 2012, 11:31:36 PM by ~Hikaru »

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #10 on: April 21, 2012, 11:33:20 PM »
But would they really care to tell anyone about them? I actually as I said I'm working on more. But when I submit more it will be in a topic.

That also may not be true. During that time our how thing was converged on planet Earth and other realms. Their history spans from galaxy after galaxy. Unless they can see everything at once they may not know the full extent of there history. I don't understand how they work really so I wouldn't know.
« Last Edit: April 21, 2012, 11:40:24 PM by Logan »

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #11 on: April 22, 2012, 12:14:34 PM »
I see your point, but
Combat Level (Average of magic level and physical strength. If you don't know what to do here, don't fill it out and the staff will help you.): 4.5
- Magic  Level: 5
- Physical Strength: 6

So, yeah, I think we need a bit of reform.
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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #12 on: April 22, 2012, 12:43:52 PM »
I see your point, but
Combat Level (Average of magic level and physical strength. If you don't know what to do here, don't fill it out and the staff will help you.): 4.5
- Magic  Level: 5
- Physical Strength: 6

So, yeah, I think we need a bit of reform.
Nik, he's saying as far as strength itself goes he uses brute force(or its at least one explanation) and magicly he'd probably rely on his Undead minions. Physically he's unskilled and magically he doesn't directly attack you, therefor he isn't as powerful as a 5.5 would be. What he's doing is saying yes his character is strong and magically powerful, no he is not all that good in a fight. Its fine.

As for you Hik, I would like to point out(even if I now own the character) Tajmira, who you never actually put a Bio down for as I recall(your own explanation being that you didn't want to restrict her history to what was stated in the Bio, I believe). Logan seems to be constantly evolving his character's history and backstory, so I see nothing wrong with letting it be. If it helps, then maybe have Logan post a sample instead to show how his character is developed, maybe? Not necessarily combat, but how it'd be used in a more peacetime situation.
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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #13 on: April 23, 2012, 09:50:14 AM »
I see your point, but
Combat Level (Average of magic level and physical strength. If you don't know what to do here, don't fill it out and the staff will help you.): 4.5
- Magic  Level: 5
- Physical Strength: 6

So, yeah, I think we need a bit of reform.
Nik, he's saying as far as strength itself goes he uses brute force(or its at least one explanation) and magicly he'd probably rely on his Undead minions. Physically he's unskilled and magically he doesn't directly attack you, therefor he isn't as powerful as a 5.5 would be. What he's doing is saying yes his character is strong and magically powerful, no he is not all that good in a fight. Its fine.

As for you Hik, I would like to point out(even if I now own the character) Tajmira, who you never actually put a Bio down for as I recall(your own explanation being that you didn't want to restrict her history to what was stated in the Bio, I believe). Logan seems to be constantly evolving his character's history and backstory, so I see nothing wrong with letting it be. If it helps, then maybe have Logan post a sample instead to show how his character is developed, maybe? Not necessarily combat, but how it'd be used in a more peacetime situation.
Thank you for explaining the combat level. I didn't know how I was going to explain it.

As for the history. Even if this character is approved right now. I'm not going to be using it til after the first part of the plot. By then I would have came up with loads of history and other topics based on these three. Can't pretend I'm going to submit them all but by then I should have enough good ones to be ready for when he does enter.

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #14 on: April 24, 2012, 05:16:34 AM »
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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #15 on: April 27, 2012, 12:28:19 AM »
I STILL want more personality from you. Just as Akida. Hawkeye doesn't get away with posting little and neither are you. "Evil,"does not say much about a character. As there's no such thing as pure evil. There's got to be more of this character than that, and it needs to be given. Copy it from the other topic if you have to, just fill it out to the best of your ability. This small thing is not showing your best ability.

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Re: Atama Darkening (The Demon of the Bodies)
« Reply #16 on: April 27, 2012, 03:13:35 PM »
I STILL want more personality from you. Just as Akida. Hawkeye doesn't get away with posting little and neither are you. "Evil,"does not say much about a character. As there's no such thing as pure evil. There's got to be more of this character than that, and it needs to be given. Copy it from the other topic if you have to, just fill it out to the best of your ability. This small thing is not showing your best ability.
Okay yes I get what your saying the evil as a personality trait is a mixture of others. No regard for others, Laughs crazily after creating a genus scheme, and a few others that are based on the person. In this plot they are considered evil simply because the whole plot is based around light and dark, good and evil. This is more of something I should put on Akida's topic, but Akida once was mortal, (What race he was, was once again, not important.) then he began to use very dark magic, in the end he viewed himself as the bringer of Darkness. (I was going to explain this in another topic.) They are considered evil by their actions. Though Atama is a curve-ball really. Though evil he may as I point out do something good. He is considered Chaotic Neutral to be honest. Evil only use is too pretty much mention Akida can't use his powers to corrupt one, for if he is trying to turn them it would be impossible to turn one who has already willingly walked down the path of darkness. I guess in the end this would be a battle of the forces of good and evil really. I would like to call this the battle of Angels and Demons, but to say that would make one believe Ally is something more than she is, and that simply was not in my intention.

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